1. Speaking

You said: ate medicine

Better way to say it: took medicine

2. Grammar

“I ache all of my body” = I had body ache

“overflew” = overflowed (past tense of overflow)

3. Pronunciation

vanished = /va-nisht/

quiet = //kwa-yet/ not /kwayt/

years = /yirs/ not /irs/

damaged = /da-meyjd/

flooded = /fla-ded/ not /flu-ded/

4. Writing

I bought a cleanser at online sotre, COUPANG about a year ago. The product is that it is good for my skin so I usually use it. And it was much cheaper than offline shop so I got it without thinking. But it took a long time about two weeks because it was oversea delivery. I could wait that long because I could save money and the cleanser that I used left. After two weeks, I got them and I found I was cheated. There were different fillings and the online store also disappeared.

Correction:

Yes, I have experienced being disappointed in a product I bought.I bought a cleanser at an online store, called COUPANG, about a year ago. This cleanser brand is what I usually use because it is good for my skin. It was much cheaper than offline shop and so I didn’t think twice, I bought it right away though the delivery took about two weeks because it was from the overseas, it was alright. I kept thinking, I saved a lot of money from my purchase.

I received the cleanser after two weeks. I found out I was cheated because the fillings were different. I was unable to file a complaint because the online store had also vanished from the selling site. This is why I was very dissatisfied with the product.

I have lived in an apartment in Seoul. It’s been over two years since I move here. There is an university so, there are many quiet cafes where we can study ans uniq restarants. And there is a famous mountain around here. The air is cleaner than other place. There is a small river where we can take a wald and quiet neighborhood. So I like living here.

Correction:

I have lived in an apartment in Seoul, South Korea. I have been here for more than two years. There is a university near my apartment. There are also many quiet cafes and unique restaurants where we can study. And there's a well-known mountain nearby. The air is cleaner here than anywhere else. The neighborhood is very peaceful. We can also take a walk along a small river. And so I enjoy living here.

As I said, there is a small river where we can take a walk. We had a downpour . Large areas of Seoul was flooded. Of course the small river overflew. Several cars were carried and our neighborhood suffered a lot of damage. I felt natural disaster are scary. These days the destroyed river is being restored. When the construction is over, I looj forward to see clean place.

Correction:

As I previously stated, my apartment is near a small river where we can go for a walk and enjoy the cherry blossoms around the area. I live in the apartment with my entire family.

One day, there was a very heavy downpour. Seoul was flooded in many areas. The small river in our place overflowed. Several cars were carried, and our neighborhood was severely damaged. It was a scary experience ~ natural disasters frighten me.

Anyhow, the affected river is currently being rebuilt. And so, I'm looking forward to seeing a clean place once the construction is finished.

I consider some factors about choosing accommodation.First, I think location is very important. I mean, it is easy to take pubic tranportation. So, I can find the place where I want to visit easily.Second is how many they have amenities and facilities. I can enjoy lesuir there.At last, I have to think the price. They have reasonable price. Honestly, the cheaper the better.

Correction:

I think about a few things when deciding where to stay. First and foremost, I believe that location is critical. Also, taking public transportation must be easy and simple so I can easily find the location I want to visit. The second factor is the number of amenities and facilities available so I can have a good time there. Finally, I must consider the cost. The accommodation must have an affordable price. To be honest, the lower the price, the better.

Overall Feedback:

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