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I explain that briefly. I am a mom and I have two sons.

I think one of the most important things is the health of my family so, I cook almost every meals myself.

And also I have to do house chores like do laundry, map the floor, do the dishes every day.

But after getting a robot vacuum cleaner from my younger sister, it is much better to clean the house.

 

Please correct these sentences and make them better.

I don't get hurt so I want better expressions.

Thank you so much.~~^^

 

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    0001_Rach 2023.02.11 23:12

    Hi~
     

    This is Teacher Rach~ Here are your corrections:

     

    I explain that briefly. I am a mom and I have two sons.

    ==> I will explain it briefly. I am a mom and I have two sons.

    I think one of the most important things is the health of my family so, I cook almost every meals myself.

    ==>  I think one of the most important things is my family's health so I cook almost every meal myself.

    And also I have to do house chores like do laundry, map the floor, do the dishes every day.

    ==> And I also have to do house chores like washing the laundry, mopping the floor, and doing the dishes every day.

    But after getting a robot vacuum cleaner from my younger sister, it is much better to clean the house.

    ==> But after getting a robot vacuum cleaner from my younger sister, it is much easier to clean the house.

     

     

    Well done~! Please take note of these errors and some suggested expressions:

    *noun form: 'every' is used with singular nouns

    *repetitive words: the word "do" was used more than once in one sentence so it will be better to omit the other 'do's'

    *vocabulary: 'easier' is better to use in your sentence

    *spelling: double-check the spelling of the word 'mop'.

     

    I hope the suggestions will help! Keep posting~~

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    im_fairyofshampoo 2023.02.17 15:07
    Thank you so much~~.^^

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