When I was young, around 10 years old, the first book I became interested in reading was My Sweet Orang Tree.
The main character's name in Jeje who is a little boy and overcomes his difficult circumstances.
I can't remember the story exactly but I was impressed from his heartbreaking story. I cried my eyes out at that time.
I learned to have a positive mind in any environment.
Affter that, I enjoyed reading romance novels and detective stories.
I spent a time for my sentimental puberty with them.
It helped me raise my kids and I used to read them bedtime stories every night.
When I didn't read them books, they didn't sleep.
Please correct these sentences and make them better.
I don't get hurt so I want better expressions.
Thank you so much.~~^^
Hi~
This is Teacher Rach~ Here are your corrections:
When I was young, around 10 years old, the first book I became interested in reading was My Sweet Orang Tree.
==> When I was young, around 10 years old, the first book I became interested in reading was "My Sweet Orange Tree."
The main character's name in Jeje who is a little boy and overcomes his difficult circumstances.
==> The main character's name is Jeje who is a little boy who overcomes his difficult circumstances.
I can't remember the story exactly but I was impressed from his heartbreaking story. I cried my eyes out at that time.
==> I can't remember the story exactly but I was impressed by his heartbreaking story. I cried my eyes out at that time.
I learned to have a positive mind in any environment.
Affter that, I enjoyed reading romance novels and detective stories.
==> After that, I enjoyed reading romance novels and detective stories.
I spent a time for my sentimental puberty with them.
==> I spent a part of my sentimental puberty on them.
It helped me raise my kids and I used to read them bedtime stories every night.
When I didn't read them books, they didn't sleep.
Wow! This is amazing~! You've improved a lot and you used a lot of great expressions in your writing, Keep up the good work! Please take note of these errors and some suggested expressions:
*verbs: Use 'is' instead of 'in' to connect your subject to the noun complement in your sentence.
*phrasal verb: the right phrase is 'to be impressed by' and 'spend on'
*vocabulary: 'part' is better to use than 'time' in your sentence to talk about a period during your puberty
*spelling: double-check the spelling of some words like 'orange' and 'after'.
I hope the suggestions will help! Keep posting~~