There is a well-known mountain called Gwanaksan so the air is cleaner hear than anywhere else.
I can see four seasons while looking at the mountain like blooming cherry blossoms, representing the green and chainging the color of the leaves and enjoying the mountain covered with snow.
And there is a small river that come down from the mountain so I can take a walk along.
There are some exercise equipment so I use them.
Please correct these sentences and make them better.
I don't get hurt so I want better expressions.
Thank you so much.~~^^
Hi~
This is Teacher Rach~ Here are your corrections:
There is a well-known mountain called Gwanaksan so the air is cleaner hear than anywhere else.
==> There is a well-known mountain called Gwanaksan and the air is cleaner here than anywhere else.
I can see four seasons while looking at the mountain like blooming cherry blossoms, representing the green and chainging the color of the leaves and enjoying the mountain covered with snow.
==> I can see four seasons while looking at the mountain through the blooming cherry blossoms, the greenery, the changing color of the leaves, and the mountain covered with snow.
And there is a small river that come down from the mountain so I can take a walk along.
==> And there is a small river that comes down from the mountain so I can take a walk along it.
There are some exercise equipment so I use them.
==> There is some exercise equipment so I use them.
Well done! There are a number of new and really good expressions in your writing, Keep it up! Please take note of these errors and some suggestions:
*conjuctions: Use 'so' when you're talking about the result. Use 'and' to add more information about something.
*suggestions: Better use 'through' to describe how you can see the four seasons while looking at the mountain and omit some words to make your sentence cohesive.
*subject-verb agreement: It should be 'comes' since you are talking about 'a small river', which is only one.
*spelling: double-check the spelling of some words like 'here' and 'changing'.
I hope the suggestions will help! Keep posting~~